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3.Happiness is the most precious thing in the world , which can be obtained in different ways.

I think health is the secret of happiness.

4.Happiness is for everyone. In fact,happiness is always around you.

●对“如何保持快乐”的一些建议

1. If you want to be happy,please remember these simple rules: Free your heart from hate .

Free your mind from worries. Live simply. Give more. Expect less. And help others. Then your happiness will increase every day.

2. Luckily ,there is a way to be happy. Think more about what we have than what we want.

Rather than wish you were able to have an enjoyable vacation on the beach,think of what fun you have had at home. Similarly ,instead of hating to do much homework, thank teachers for helping you get knowledge. Take a deep breath and think of everything you have ever had.

3. For example, your good attitude towards doing homework can bring excellent grades in

examination because practice makes perfect.

●总结性的话语

1.Pay more attention to what you have, and you’ll probably get more of what you want.

2.Satisfaction is a kind of feeling that needs to be felt from inside. It’s very important to be satisfied with what you’ve got if you enjoy the pleasure of the simple life, and good luck will follow you.

3.Start to focus on what we have . The more we feel satisfied , the more happily we’ll have .

4.Life is like a revolving door. When it closes, it also opens. If you take every chance, you can be happy all the time.

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Everyone wants to have a happy life, but do you know how to be happy?

The first secret of happiness is to be honest. No one wants to make friends with dishonest people. What’s more, if you lie to others , you will worry weather they will know the truth so that you will be not only very anxious but also unhappy.

May be you will wonder how to keep happy. One of the best ways is to tell the truth to your friends ,teachers and parents . Secondly ,you ought to face your mistakes. As the proverb says , “failure is the mother of success.” Don’t be afraid of your mistakes.

Generally speaking, I believe that we should be honest. Only in this way can we keep ourselves happy. Honesty, the first secret of happiness , how important it is!

点评与评分

文章开门见山，直奔主题。论据充分，所用从句和连接词恰到好处。按中考作文20分计算，属于第二档~第一档的文章，可得17分左右。需改进之处：

1.whether 和weather 同音不同意。在文中应用whether 表示宾语从句的“是否”

2.May be 是情态动词的用法，不能放在句首，此处用“maybe”