尝樱桃翻译鉴赏

“Translating consists in reproducing in the receptor language the closest natural equivalent of the source language(SL) message, first in terms of meaning and secondly in terms of style.(Nida)

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译风随文风？

1、用词选择(word

choice) pattern

2、句式选用(sentence

choice)

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用词选择(word choice)

原文用词有文采，讲究修饰，多见叠词，使得原 文富有音律美。其中数词和量词的多次使用，为 读者生动的展现了赏樱，尝樱的场景。而所给译 文则采取直译化的词，失去原文的音律美，改变 了原文清新自然的文风。

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用词选择(word choice)Examples:

原文：层层叠翠、枝枝丫丫、处处压 枝低、细雨蒙蒙、一颗、两颗、一串、 两串、

译文：verdant plants, exuberantbranches and twigs, bend with fruit, a misty drizzle , one by one, bunch by bunchPage 4

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句式选用(sentence pattern choice)

原文多以短句，散句，四字格居多，语句简练，使 得原文读起来朗朗上口，富有节奏美。而译文多以 长句复杂句居多，多用整句的表达方式，使得译文 冗长繁复，改变了原文流畅简洁的行文风格。

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句式选用(sentence pattern choice)Examples:

老家有个小院，院子里有树，层层叠翠， 唯有那两棵樱桃树，满身裹着霞披。In this courtyard grow verdant plants, among which are two cherry trees bearing red fruit just like two beautiful Chinese brides in red capes.

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句式选用(sentence pattern choice)Examples:

背着手，用嘴将樱桃从树枝上叼下，一颗，两棵； 闭着眼，咬住樱桃，一串，两串。酸甜和着雨珠， 爽而解渴，闲情逸致中，令人心驰神悦。 With my hands at my back, I picked the cherries one by one by mouth from the tree. With eyes closed, I savored them bunch by bunch. My heart felt cheerful and carefree as I leisurely savored the sweet and sour cherry mingled with rain drops, which not only quenched my thirst, but also refreshed me.Page 7

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句式选用(sentence pattern choice)Examples:

“五一”期间适逢下雨，阵雨过后，便是细雨蒙蒙。

每棵樱桃上都挂着那么个小水珠，闪着晶莹。

It was raining on May Day holiday, with a misty drizzle following the showers. Thus, on each cheery was glistening a rain drop.Page 8

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句式选用(sentence pattern choice)Examples:

两棵树就立于院子里那条唯一的水泥路的两侧，相互交错， 若不躬身，委实难以前行。置身于樱桃树下，宛如置身于 百果园中，前头是果子，后头还是果子，或红、或黄、或 绿，就那么玲珑有加，就那么剔透备至。 Since the trees stood at each side of the only concrete road of the yard, I had to bend down to pass through. Standing under the cherry trees, I felt as if I were in an orchard, with red, yellow and green cherries fro

nt, back, and all around. How cute and exquisite they were!Page 9

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总结(conclusion)

译文虽具有原文的信息功能，表达了作者对樱桃 的喜爱，对恬静乡村生活的赞美，但因遣词造句 运用的不当，导致译文美感功能的缺失，造成了 文风上的不对等。

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Thank you !